The Final

The Final
How I have improved my skills

1. Explain one or two ways your writing has improved over the semester. Include a few examples from your posts over time, with analysis, to illustrate how the improvement(s) happened.

When I started blogging, I didn't really know how or what to write about. It wasn't till my 3rd blog post where I understood blogs. After my 3rd post I started to listen to music and it gave me ideas about what to write about. Music changed my mood, and it helped me write more and I was happy so my writing was better, in my view. I believe my skills were improving based on others opinions. Also, the other goal I made for my posts, and writing in general, is think about the reader. I needed to write about something more interesting and pick topics that would grab peoples attention, even in titles, no one is going to want to read a blog post titled BLOG. It sounds boring and does not grab attention. Because the readers are the people who are going to be commenting or grading, it makes more sense to think of some thing they would want to read. I still keep my own style but change little things after proofreading it.

My past work wasn't that good compared to my present work, I've made many improvements in my writing. One major change is organizing. In my beginning post I put everything together and it wasn't very organized. But presently, I've been putting paragraphs in my writing. Another thing I was bad at was proofreading for errors. Here's an example; "well,i like taking vacations, and trips.I'm actually taking a trip to L.A. this weekend, so i have to write before i leave. i am going to a off road event, the orange county fairgrounds will be full of sand rails, and dirt bike, and trucks. i am interested in all of this. then i am going to Disney land for my sisters birthday, and i am really excited for California screaming, every time Ive been there, i was too little or scared but i came over my fear and now i love roller coasters,". I use to not proofread, and try to finish fast. As you can see, I made many mistakes and used comma's too many times. An example of my present work is this whole blog minus that old post piece. I've had my friends read my work, and they said they have even seen improvements in most areas. It really helps when I get my friends to help proofread because they are not afraid to say if it's really bad or it means more to me when my friend says I did good, because I know they are not lying.

7. What have you learned from your struggles with writer's block? Why do you tend to get stuck? How do you tend to get unstuck? Notice any patterns?

I do get writers block, but what helps me a lot is music, because when I'm at home doing a blog post, I am listening to music, so I just change songs, which puts me in different moods. For example, Vampire Weekend, an alternative band which makes me feel good , it's really upbeat music; so are The Wombats, a British band, which my friends introduced me to. Both of those bands are good mood setters, so they are mainly the only bands I listen to while writing. I think it brings me to remember happy memories, so I write about that. I don't find it a distraction unless I am singing along or listening to it loud. I get a lot of my music from my two friends, Stephen Rhodes and Chris Maier, they both blog about music a lot. That is the first way I get unstuck, and if that doesn't work, which is not often. I go eat, go on facebook and watch television, and about half-an-hour later, I should have some fresh ideas because I had 30 minutes to think. And sometimes when I'll do something, and an idea will just pop in my head. This always works for me, and I've actually used it this year because I have run out of ideas.

Writers blog is very popular among young writers especially in high school, I've heard many teenagers talking about how they get writers block. I don't really notice any patterns in this problem or my solutions, the only thing I can think of that would cause this is having to write about something with no topic or writing all you know about something, but blogs are cool in that sense because we can change subjects, and if we look online, there are millions of different topics to write about. I find that the when I do get writers block, it is frustrating because I want to finish so I try to hurry up and find or think of an idea, unless I'm doing the thirty minute break, because sometimes, I'm in a hurry or I have a time period to finish it. In school, when we are at the computer lab, I do have time, but not enough time to get writers block and take thirty minutes off so I need to be a little bit quick if I want to finish in school.

8. How do you like having a blog? How has blogging changed the way you write, the way you think, or the way you think about writing?

Blogs have changed my style in writing by making me think more about what I'm writing. I'm still going off the top of my head unless I'm copying a Quickwrite, but I'll think about how to revise my thoughts before I write it down. I do like blogs for the most part; It makes me remember the good times. Also, one cool thing about blogs is I will have them forever. They are always on google documents and blogger, so as long as I can remember my account and password, I'll be able to access them. Also, I like being able to read and get to them from any computer, because of google documents, it is my favorite feature. It is nice to get comments on what I am writing on, its cool to see others peoples commentary, and it's good to hear criticism because it's a good way to improve on my writing. If everyone just said I did good, I wouldn't change my writing or know how to.

It hasn't really changed the way I think, besides making me write more informative for the reader, and looking for topics that some one would find interesting. I do think about blogs a little different since I have started, I take more time in them now, and it shows, or at least I think so. I also think about it for another reason, I'll have it forever, possibly, so I should try harder. In years from now if I look at these post, I don't want to think I could have tried harder, and I didn't put enough effort in blogging. I want to be proud and also, want to read them all, there is already 16, and I'm only going to write more, so it is almost like a small book. So far, this has been my biggest blog, and I've enjoyed writing about this because I can change subjects by answering another question. This is the end of my evaluational final.

Not Sure about topic for this blog?

1. I would like to hear other people opinions on my work and my blogs. I think that someone my age would understand my blogs a little different than a teacher just because they know exaclty what it is to be in my generation as a teenager, a teachers point of view would have a different effect on my blog.

2. Also, i think my advice could be useful for the same reasons i stated above, because of my age in this generation. I need to doublecheck my work, but its wierd because i dont reraded my work, and i might not caught all of my mistakes i make on my own writing, but with someone else work, who has a differnt style then me, i could doublecheck, and caught some errors i would but they might overlook. It is possibly, but this might not work for everybody, because there is exceptions.

3.Personally, i would like to work with a mix, but more with my freinds, because friends "with homework at least" can be completely honest, like i said before, there are exceptions, but it would and can be akward being completely honest with someone you dont know too well, or dislike. For example, someone who really likes one of there writings, and someone they dont know told them it was bad, you might not take it in or care, but with a friend, there is more trust, and i would care if a friend told me my work was bad.

4.Some rules id like to see for writing groups are only comments that can help, and no put downs on other people work that would make them feel bad, because some people take pride in their writing. Im not even sure about what rules would really help writing groups?

A new year

New Years Resolution
At last, it is 2010, a new year, and what many people think is a fresh start. It is a fresh start, or what else could be called fresh start, For me, it is stay out of any possible trouble till i get my license, which is my goal.i can get it in about 2 months, i think i mentioned this in my last blog? Also, my second resolution is to save money for my car, for gas money, road trip or upgrade something, likw get a gps or better speakers.

Every year i here about this resolutions, and how people dont make them, or only do it for a couple weeks then stop, but i only need to do mine for 2 months, so i know ill complete it, then after that, ill just have to save money for those mentioned reasons. I am really excited about this goal, and because i am, it means i will try extra hard to get a license, but if it was , for example, getting good grades, i would want to but probably not put a huge amount of effort into it.

My resolution last year was to save up money, and i did, but i used most of it on a new dirt bike which i have explained before. I am acually going riding with it tomorow. i have also heard, maybe even the most commen resolution, is to either lose weight or diet there food eating habits, this is bad because it means that a lot of people are a bit chubby or obeist, which is very sad, but true. Many celebratys make goals for there new years too, but it is very different from a commen or average person because of their gross net of money. It could be do more or less films, or buy more properties. But thats good for them. i have to get some sleep because i have to awake at 530 in the mourning, im going riding at twain hearte.

A new start

I am going to write about a trip. A great trip i took with my friends. Last winter i went snowboarding with 3 of my friends, Cameron, stephen, and jj. We left Camerons house at 4 am on a saturday mourning. That night we didn't fall asleep till 3 and got about an hours worth of sleep. After we awoke we hopped in the car and drove about an hour and a half to pick up jj, we doesn't live in alameda. We arrived at sugar bowl at roughly 6:30 after a stop at denny's. We got out of the car and put our snow clothing on then walked over to the building and registration area, or watever it is called. After we all payed and rented snowboards we hit the slopes and took the first hill, it wasn't the bunny hill, and i forgot name and after we got to the top, i buckled my bindings and took off, after a short run, i fell, on my back, and sled down the icy mountain. I got up and tried again, and once again, the same thing has happened, i tried again, it took me along time to get down the mountain, and i fell many times. I got down and my friends were waiting for me, next was the bunny hill, which i did alittle bit better at. All day was hard for me because it takes a few trips to be able to go all the way down a mountain with out falling. I did almost all runs, there was a few black diamonds i wasn't about to try, but for the most part i felt i did ok, until the end of the day which was all bad.
So after we stopped for lunch at the overpriced cafe, we hit some more runs, they at a really long hill, where the more speed you get, the better, so you won't hace to walk when it gets to be flat, and it is hard to unbuckle, the walk with a snowboard in deep snow, so, i decided to get speed by going straight and i was going at a decent speed, i thought it was really fast, and the, the worst thing that could of happened happened, the side of the board dug into the snow, and then my face, acually, my forehead hit the ground really hard, and i couldnt move alot, so i went to the side with my friend and layed down for like 20 minutes, after that i we walked to the building then i sat down and we talked till we left, for maybe an hour. We walked to the car and drove home sfter that.

Better Blogs

Yesterday i was talking with my friend about my blogs and i realized that my blogs werent that good. Chris Maier inspired me to write about something that was more important and interesting to the reader. He has read my past blogs and stated how poorly writtten they were, i just wanted to get enough words but that wont help me and no one wants to read 300 words with no meaning. So i need to write about a good topic that i could write more than one or two blogs about. im going to write about more trips and everywhere ive been out of the Bay area. Im going to start with a short blog about my birthday this year in March.

So Its my birthday and im turning 15 years old and im going to a place that i got to pick out, pismo beach, with my family and family friends which was good because i like going riding with alot of people, and taking rides with the fastest riders is fun. Usally, i dont go out to far unless im with someone else, just in case something acually happens, or if my bike breaksdown, i have a way to go get help.okay, so after the 7 hour drive to get there we didnt get stuck in the sand, we had a truck and 18 ft. flat trailer with all the bikes and quads. It was kinda heavy but not too bad, because the heavier the load, the easier it is to get stuck. so we parked and unloaded and i started to ride around camp and its a beach, so i was riding next to the water to try and pull up saome wheelies, but i wasnt that good at holding a wheelie, i needed more practice. i am going to continue this blog later.

nEW BLOG POST FOR ME

Darn cap locks, lol. Okay i have decided that i am goibg to write about the art drawing i analized, fuck, I do, I have, I am. I think that Steinburg is trying to portray in this drawingh that there is three sepereate sections to a person. First off, "I Am", the base to this group of sections, is jus like the template, to who you acually are. Next is is 'I have', which is written like hanging cloths that is being dryed. Im not sure but, but i think this means what are your possesions and what do you own and questions like this, The cloths are materials ion the picture. The top and next question in this picture is "I Do", and it is like some kind of energy, kinda confusing. It is in the sky and and it is a bright array of colors, bright colors. I Do is, using energy to do something, i dont know what or if it matters what, but doing something. It is possibly to describe someone with these teree traits. Im making a ton of mistakes on this blog because i put the papr on the computer so i could see what im writing very good. Im not sure if this is enough words, i think itr is but john mah said its not enough words so i am continueing on in my blog by just doing this and keep on typing to say watever else i can to make this fit on a whole pagh`e, i just typed a bunch of words, but i dont think i have typed enough yet, i am typing kinda pretty bad, its not good but i dont know what else i can say about sometrhing on his blog, at least i got plenty of new friends at this school, its good, yeahh.

New style

Okay, for this blog i am getting a small dosage of writers block and i dont know what would be a good topic. But art least i am doing the blog this time, yeahh. so, eyy, ummm, well, o yeah, for thanksgiving im going to dumont dunes, but i already talked abut that. Wateve penis , ill talk about it some more. I havent got a new bike yet and im leaving tuesday, but i can ride a ktm 300, which is a big two stroke and i am going to get a paddle tire, but i am still hoping to get a cr250 dirt bike, which is a really bad ass bike. most freestylers use that bike. Well, i am super excitd for the trip and my best friend is going. Yep, this is prolly gonna ber the best trip of my life so far untill i gat older so i can go with only my friends which is gonna be awsome, just a guys trip going dirt biking but with girls too, it sounds really fun. I dont really know what else to write about but i think i am almost done with this hole post.Jerkin, ive been saying jerkin alot lately and i donrt know why, its that one song, jerkin, jerkin, jerkin. Its kinda catchy i guess but its alrteady gettiong old. And the people who made that song also made a dance called the jerk. Or jerkin, kinda wierd but not really that fun, just funny to do in froint of poeple. Okay, i need 40 more words in this post, or blog post to be more precise. I only need a few more words, what should i write about, umm\. im almost done with this blog, yEAHH. iM ABOUT TO GO TO LUNCH AND IT IS FOOD FAIRE DAY, BUT IM ABOUT TO GO TO MCDONALKDS WWITH ALOT OF MY FREINDS. iTS GONNA BE CROWDED THERER, LOOL, WATEVER, ITS GOOD THOUGH. gOOOD BYE BRUH. OPPS, CAPITOLS, MY BAD.